I think you did well capturing the personalities of our heroes, especially Puddleglum! Every word out of his mouth was dreary, disheartening and so perfectly captured his character. It was good of Pole and Scrubb to learn early on to disregard all the gloominess; once they got past that, they could see how smart and wise the Marshwiggle is. It made sense that Jill would have so many insecurities here, being an outsider to the adventures, thinking over her failures and being concerned about the whereabouts of her Mum. But at least she worked through it all and not only managed to get past most of her worries to help save Rilian, but she was rewarded with a vision of her mother, and finally learning a little of why she heard nothing from her in so long.