http://starbrowsings.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] starbrowsings.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] narniaexchange 2012-12-23 10:16 pm (UTC)

[Insert incoherent babbling here] This was incredible. Gorgeous. Peter putting the Giant wars ahead of the pleasures of home and the traditions of decorating the tree - I'm picturing a Narnian Rockefeller-type unveiling - but it is so very cold and lonely out there on the moors, and the toils of the campaign take their toll.

Then your picture of him dropping to the ground and seeing the "Christmas Tree for border-guards"...!!!! That last line broke my heart.

Your use of words here was exquisite. It really added to the mood of the setting, too, lean and sparse storytelling but each word counting. Truly wonderful job, Helio!

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